Monument Soul

to be continued...

Days of the season ,seasons of the day (it is autumm) It is Autumn, the years afternoon the leaves darken to red as do the rays of the setting sun ...

:shock: .... that didn't even look by BAD live-action anime movie.... that looked like straight to DVD kung-fu poop!!!

I find calling this new trend of behavior amongst domesticated canines "morals" as rather un-scientific... :roll: who's actually willing to put faith in "chivalry amongst dogs" I'm not... I find ...

enchanting imagery,nothing more beautiful than a happy child...but I digress the structure is unique (as it should be) I like how you give away so much information on the characters ...

The Monotone Dagger : Real~Talk slice .1 child of the dagger In a world, where the oblivious were the norm, ignorance in itself was its own protection from being seen ...

It sounds like a decent start. And the fact that you've been slaving over it for all these years certainly helps. I myself have never been able to write a ...

Nicely done. Only thing I can say is that maybe you should consider your spacing between paragraphs, because it comes across very abrupt when it's being read. With that said, ...

the the uneventful travel portion of you story isn'r working because...well... it's uneventful. strange and relevent happenings taking place over the travels is a good way to develop character and ...

for instance here is a piece of the prologue this will show what I've ended up with from that simple idea I had six years ago [Existence The world was ...

How did you possibly concieve of a metaphysical epic in only the 5th grade? 0_0 It was relatively simple at the time... I had an idea I thought would be ...

yeah, you tell em' God!!!! I really enjoyed this poem, because I could see where you were coming from and where you were going... the poem itself isn't an open ...

hmm I didn't know where you were taking me at first... but i guess I just needed to sit back and watch you go ...hmm it becomes unclear what you ...

umm next time...don't make it so...horizontal the writing was great...I love a good love story. the rose metaphor is beautiful. I myself often use metaphors in my writing. a rose ...

hmm like a few have said already... you barged in out of left field with the modern day aspect to the world...